Sunday Six ~ Cherry Tune-Up

 

Here are the first six sentences of our erotic free read Cherry Tune-Up: 

Bobbi Jo Martin hung back in the shadows under the Highway Thirty-Seven Racetrack stands. Acrid smoke, fumes and dust from a long night of racing swirled in the hazy light but couldn’t entirely block her view of her childhood best friend. There he was, Jack Day, strutting toward a red pickup with a buxom brunette clinging on each arm. She cringed—they must be the spoils that went to the winner of the feature race.

Deflated, Bobbi Jo shuffled toward her rental car. She’d had no contact with Jack for nearly ten years, but she just knew he’d help her with her current problem.

You can read more about Cherry Tune-Up HERE, and you can read the entire book free at Literotica.com. Here’s a LINK to Chapter One, enjoy!

 

38 Responses to “Sunday Six ~ Cherry Tune-Up”

  1. Right I’m off to read Cherry Tune-Up! Fantastic intro, looking forward to the whole story. Thank you.

     
    • OOoo, thanks, Alix – can’t wait to hear how you like it!

       
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  2. Bobbi Jo sounds like she needs someone like Jack to rev her engine. Great intro!

     
    • Exactly!

       
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  3. Wow! I want to read that! Published on Literotica? Why isn’t it published at Smashwords or something, girlfriend?

    I love reunion (and rescue) stories! Great six. I could smell the fumes–and feel her pain. Excellent job!

    Kally

     
    • OOoo thanks, Kally!

      We wanted to get something out there as a free read & someone recommended Literotica, so off we went – we’ve had great numbers over there and some fun feedback. Have to check out Smashwords – tell me why you like it!

       
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  4. Wonderful hook! Well written. I want more so you did your job. Great first SSS. I love Bobbi Jo’s voice.

     
    • Thanks! Sometimes I think the first few lines are the hardest – how to set the hook and get the info we want out there, without dumping too much in. Glad it worked!

       
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  5. sounds fun. do you publish on Literotica a lot? I have read some there…
    nice work
    Liz

     
    • Thanks, Liz. That’s our only one at Literotica so far – they mostly have short stories, and we tend to write novellas or full length. We serialized this one into chapters, seemed to work okay.

       
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  6. Good six. Poor guy is going to loose his twin blonds.

     
  7. awesome – love it

     
  8. Of course, now I have to read the entire thing. Great six and thanks for sharing more. 🙂

     
  9. Now, I want to read it all…sheesh! Entice me why don’t you 🙂 Groovy six!

     
  10. Thanks, all – enticement is what it’s all about!

     
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  11. You have captured a scene full of country mystic. I wonder how she’s going to capture him.

     
    • actually, it’s a huge question who will capture whom!

       
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  12. Great description. Great conflict. Hooked by this.l

     
    • OOoo every time i see the word “hooked” I do a happy dance! Yay!

       
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  13. Loved it!

     
  14. I love characters with a history. Good six.

     
  15. A really great six! Some really good emotion. xx

     
    • Thanks – I’m not sure who’s going to tug at whose heartstrings harder, actually!

       
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  16. Awww. Don’t give up already!

     
    • Bobbi Jo’s too spunky to ever give up!

       
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  17. She needs someone to get her engine racing!

     
    • Definitely!

       
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  18. Great description, loved it!

     
  19. Great six – you’ve really set the scene. I hope Jack notices her and helps!

     
    • Oh, I think he’ll notice, all right! But help? That’ll come on his own terms…

       
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  20. Poor thing…feeling so deflated – love the emotion you display- great 6

     
    • Thanks so much Dawne – turns out, she’ll be facing some of the biggest decisions of her life, the emotional roller coaster’s only just begun!

       
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  21. Great conflict! Can’t wait to find out what she needs to tell him!

     
  22. Great potential here, especially as an opening hook. Well done!

     
  23. Good beginning. Lots of questions raised here. Very nice.

     
  24. Love how he’s strutting off with 2 brunettes! I could definitely feel her hesitation to approach. Wonder how she’s going to get to him to get the help she needs!

     
  25. Thanks everyone for the terrific comments – exactly what authors love to hear from readers!

     
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  26. Wow, excellent six. Well done 🙂

     

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